Why? I used the entire intro to Banachek's Pre Thoughts stage show when I performed it last month - took me in excess of 3 minutes and everyone stuck with me from word one to the end. As long as you can deliver it in a manner befitting the show I say keep it as is. It's good, a little bit Mulder but nobody remembers the X-files anymore anyway
Seriously, I like it. If anything I'd maybe try to make it a little longer. I guess it's mentalism you're introducing?
(my additions/alterations in italics
To everything there is an explanation. With this you may agree. As for me? I agree,
that is my opinion as well. Well, kind of. You see, for me
there is a word missing from
this 'theory'. I believe that there is an explanation to MOST things
. We can explain human biology, or how we cook food, the existence of cars for example. But,
there are still entities in this world that are yet to be explained. UFOs, life after death, Jessica Alba's amazing looks...and the human mind...the psyche. One of the most complex machines that has ever been encountered. Science is still unsure as to how much of the mind we use conciously at any one time. A good estimate would be about 10%, although if there's a nuerosurgeon in the house..? Let's take 10% as our number shall we? That means that there's 90% of brain either working in the background, or not working at all. Imagine if you could engage that huge portion of your brain and use it, what new abilities might you learn? Super memory? Savontistic mathmatics? Maybe, just maybe, you might be able to read peoples' thoughts, their dreams and aspirations, their feelings, their needs and their fears. Maybe.
Oh, and there is one other thing I forgot to mention
has no logical
explanation........What you are about to see. (Are you watching closely? If you are, chances are----it's not close enough.)
I'm not 100% on this last line but I still kinda like it so I'm not removing it. Don't feel obliged to even like a single edit I've done, I've just turned it into something I feel would play up the nature of the act more. Of course, not knowing you or your act this might have missed the mark entirely, in which case I'll consider it a good exercise in style.